Essay sample #14

Essay sample #14

Essay task 14

Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. 

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement:it is necessary to maintain public parks 

Body 1: public parks serve a variety of functions

  • for exercising
    • many exercise-doers visit parks everyday 
    • parks have special meaning
  • for gatherings
    • hang out, unwind, reinforce relationships

Body 2: accommodation and business centers also contribute to the society

  • lack of housing will lead to many problems
    • poverty
    • health issues
  • financial centers help to boost economy 
    • Services should be available everywhere
    • They help to benefit from residents' wealth
  • those buildings do not take up space

Conclusion: restate

As a matter of fact, the population is booming everywhere, and people's lives are more and more challenging. Some people suggest clearing parks to make way for residential areas or financial centers. However, I believe it is necessary to maintain all of these in odder to ensure a holistic development of a country.

On the one hand, public parks play a significant role, as they serve a variety of functions. City dwellers need parks for exercising. A large number of exercise-doers visit parks on a daily basis in the morning and evening to enhance their physical well-being. To them, these parks have special meaning. Furthermore, parks are ideal for gatherings. Friends, families and couples go to parks to enjoy a day out together, unwinding after long days of working and reinforcing their relationships.

On the other hand, accommodation and business centers also contribute to the society. If there is a lack of housing, the population will suffer, especially those from crowded areas. Overpopulation can lead to all kinds of problems, ranging from poverty to health issues. Furthermore, to boost the economy, there needs to be financial centers. Shopping malls, supermarkets, and services of all kinds should be available everywhere. Without these, it will be impossible to benefit from residents' wealth. More importantly, both these types of buildings do not always take up space, as new technology makes it possible to take advantage of the vertical space: high-rise blocks of apartments and multi-story commercial centers will be beneficial to a city plan.

All things considered, both public parks and other structures are pivotal to the overall development of a society. Therefore, it would be logical to maintain parks, accommodation and business structures.

281 words, written by Mr.Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. boom (v): increase
  2. make way for (v): be replaced by
  3. residential area (n)
  4. a holistic development (n): a whole development
  5. serve a variety of functions
  6. city dweller (n): city inhabitants
  7. exercise-doer (n)
  8. on a daily basis (adv): everyday
  9. enhance physical well-being (v)
  10. enjoy a day out together (v)
  11. unwind (v) relax
  12. after long days of work(ing)
  13. reinforce relationships
  14. range from... to...
  15. boost (v): help to improve
  16. benefit from (v)
  17. be pivotal to (a): be very important to
Essay sample #13

Essay sample #13

Essay task 13

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: when local businesses are closed, local life actually improves

Body 1: not all local firms offer benefits to the society

  • Small businesses lack funding.
    • -> facilities are not good
    • -> produce dangerous things & harm the environment
  • local businesses cannot bring in large economic benefits
    • lack of market & labor force ->cannot expand production
    • -> no benefit to the society

Body 2: large businesses bring huge advantages for the locality.

  • job vacancies
    • more people will be employed
    • unskilled workers can earn stable income
  • better quality of products
    • they can invest more money into market research
    • safety is ensured

Conclusion: restate

With the advent of huge supermarkets, a large majority of local businesses are on the verge of bankruptcy. However, this does not mean the death of local communities. From my point of view, when local businesses are closed, local life actually improves.

First of all, not all local firms offer benefits to the society. Private businesses on small scale usually lack funding. Therefore, their facilities tend not to meet the required safety level. Numerous small firms in my hometown operate without guarantee of the origins of products, of the manufacturing process, and of the safety procedure. These produce nothing but dangerous things to people's lives and the environment. The most severe case involves a household trying to produce plastic tubes, which in turn destroyed the underground water of the whole area. Furthermore, insufficient resources mean these local businesses cannot bring in large economic benefits. When there is not enough market research and labor force, it will be impossible to expand production. Without private income, the society does not benefit.

On the other hand, if large businesses are here to stay, there will be huge advantages for the locality. The most obvious boon is job vacancies. When a new factory is constructed, for example, more people will be employed, and their life will be dramatically enhanced. Unskilled workers in rural areas will have a chance to earn a stable monthly living. Another noticeable change will be the quality of products. Large companies can invest more money into market research as well as R&D, which will help them understand the needs of the society and manufacturing the highest quality products possible. Safety will also be ensured, as these companies have registered their business license with the authority: it is easier to supervise and monitor their manufacturing process.

All things considered, while it might be true that small businesses will be doomed with large enterprises enter local areas, this certain will lead to enormous developments to the places themselves.

326 words, written by Mr.Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. advent (n): appearance
  2. be on the verge of + noun/V.ing
  3. on a small scale
  4. lack funding
  5. meet the required safety level
  6. the origin of products
  7. the manufacturing process
  8. the safety procedure
  9. insufficient resources
  10. bring in large economic benefits
  11. market research
  12. labor force
  13. be here to stay: be permanent
  14. boon (n): advantage
  15. unskilled workers
  16. earn a stable monthly living
  17. supervise and monitor
  18. be doomed (a): be heavily impacted
Essay sample #12

Essay sample #12

Essay task 12

With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. 

What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty?

How can this be solved?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: there are huge advantages, and there are two ways to protect 

Body 1: Benefits 

  • they attract tourists 
    • example: Ha Long Bay
  • they help to preserve traditions and customs
    • Each natural site is connected with a local area
    • if protected, they maintain the culture of a country

Body 2: both the government and the individual can protect 

  • Governments can regulate tourism
    • monitor agencies, companies and operators 
    • set up laws
  • Individual can help as well
    •  clear garbage, or plant more trees and greenery
    • run campaigns to raise awareness 

Conclusion: restate

As cities are modernized and rural areas are urbanized, natural beauty worldwide is experiencing a reduction in size. As far as I am concerned, there are huge advantages from natural beauty spots, and there are two major ways to protect these places.

Scenic spots offer tremendous benefits to a country. Firstly, they attract tourists. Most countries in the world boast breath-taking landscapes, and these places draw the attention of visitors from all corners of the globe. Ha Long Bay in Vietnam is a good example: the mesmerizing beauty of the bay fascinate millions of travelers every year, which in turn brings huge income to the local area in particular, and to the whole country in general. Furthermore, beauty spots help to preserve traditions and customs. Each natural site is connected with a local area, with its unique legends, fairy tales, and traditional practices. The cultural values in these places are gigantic: if protected, they maintain the culture of a country.

In order to protect these sites, both the government and the individual can play a part. Governments can regulate the development of tourism. They can monitor how travel agencies, tourist companies and tour operators impact the environment. They can set up laws to make sure businesses do not harm the ecosystem. On the other hand, individuals can take initiatives to protect their own natural beauty spots. For example, local residents could join hands to clear garbage, or plant more trees and greenery. They might also run campaigns to raise awareness of environmental values, and of the significance of the place they are trying to preserve.

In conclusion, natural scenic sites are of paramount importance to a country, and both the authorities and individuals can lend a helping hand in preserving these locations.

Word count: 291

 

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. modernize (v)
  2. urbanized (v)
  3. experience a reduction in size
  4. offer (tremendous) benefits to
  5. boast (v): to offer sth that you are proud of
  6. from all corners of the globe
  7. the mesmerizing beauty (n)
  8. preserve traditions and customs
  9. gigantic (a): huge
  10. regulate (v): monitor
  11. set up laws (v)
  12. take initiatives to (v): take action
  13. run campaigns (v)
  14. be of paramount importance (a)
  15. lend a helping hand in sth
Essay sample #11

Essay sample #11

Essay task 11

Famous actors and some professional sports people can command a very high salary. Some people think that this is fair because salaries should be based on people’s gifts and talents. Others, however, believe that a person’s salary should be based on their contribution to society.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: to pay fairly, both factors should be considered

Body 1: people’s talents set them off from others

  • not everyone is born good at certain thing
    • most workers do their jobs through hard work and training
    • gifted people offer more benefits
  • no born talent grows without perspiration
    • they all need to go through training and education
    • they deserve a high salary for their efforts

Body 2: payment should also be based on the social contribution

  • talents not supporting the society will be useless
  • social contribution is treasurable and noteworthy.
    • example: teachers, doctors, and many other professions

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

When it comes to salary, people are divided over the appropriate amount paid to different individuals. Some propose a consideration of one’s aptitude, while others advocate taking into account one’s social contribution. From my perspective, to allocate payment accordingly, it is of paramount importance to take heed of both.

On the one hand, people’s talents and gifts set them off from others. Firstly, not everybody is born with a certain knack for a certain thing. The majority of workers carry out their tasks based on hard work and training, yet some over-perform thanks to their inborn capability. In most cases, these people offer more benefits to a company or organization than the average employee. They also support the society in certain ways: most comedians, actors, singers, and those in the entertainment field are natural talents. Without these people, a touch of relaxation will be missing from life. Furthermore, no born talent grows without perspiration. They all need to go through further training and education in order to polish their skills and enhance their working performance. Considering the efforts they make to maximize their gifts, it is fair to say they deserve a high salary.

On the other hand, remuneration should also be grounded in a person’s contribution to the society. If talents do not support the locality, then such will be useless, and a high pay in this case only makes things worse. However, if people contribute largely to social causes, all their work is treasurable and noteworthy. Teachers, doctors, and many other professions, while not always including talented people, lend a huge helping hand to the development of social life. Hence, a handsome pay is justifiable.

All in all, it is necessary to bear in mind both a person’s talent and the amount of contribution to the society he/she makes whenever the issue of payment arises.

308 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. When it comes to sth 
  2. aptitude (n): natural ability
  3. advocate (v): publicly support 
  4. take into account: consider
  5. allocate accordingly: distribute appropriately
  6. of paramount importance: very important
  7. take heed of: to consider
  8. set sb off: to make sb attractive by being clear different
  9. knack (n): a skill or ability
  10. inborn capability: natural ability
  11. a touch of relaxation: the feeling of relaxation
  12. perspiration (n): the physical process of producing liquid on your skin
  13. polish a skill: improve a skill
  14. remuneration (n) payment from work
  15. ground (v): to base a decision or idea on sth
  16. cause (n): event
  17. lend a helping hand
  18. handsome pay: large payment
  19. bear in mind: to remember to consider
Essay sample #10

Essay sample #10

Essay task 10

People have a stronger liking for bad news, such as crimes and wars, than good news. Therefore, many people believe that more bad news should be broadcast.

What is your opinion?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: I strongly advocate the broadcast of more good news as this establishes optimism in the society.

Body 1: Negative news offers certain merits

  • The media can gain noticeable benefits
    • media benefits from increasing viewing rate
    • News reporters, journalists,... will earn more money
  • Bad news raises people's awareness
    • people know about latest news, diseases, criminals...
    • people can protect themselves against them

Body 2: Good news can bring a positive outlook

  • good news helps people believe in humanity
    • example: philanthropists 
  • more goods news means a finer balance
    • example: reports on volunteers 

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

As a matter of public opinion, bad news is generally favored over good ones: broadcasts of wars, crimes, and social evils attract a large number of viewers. While I do acknowledge the benefits of such coverage, I strongly advocate the broadcast of more good news as this establishes a sense of optimism in the society.

Negative news offers certain merits. The most noticeable concerns the media itself. As more people watch bad news, the general viewing figures increase, and the field of media can benefit from this. News reporters, journalists, and correspondents who compose such news will certainly earn a more handsome living. In addition, news of this type raises people's awareness of on-going social problems. Without such coverage, the population will definitely be unconscious of the latest current affairs, diseases and criminal activities. This means they stand a smaller chance of protecting themselves against potential incidents.

However, bad news cannot satisfy all: if more good news is available, a positive outlook can be created in the public. Firstly, news of those who make a difference in the society reinforces people's belief in humanity. There have been cases of philanthropists who devote their time, wealth and efforts to helping those in need, and such reports make people feel confident in a better future world. Furthermore, more goods news means a finer balance. Besides the terrible content of a disaster, for example, reports on volunteers rushing to the aid of others and on communities lending a helping hand to the sufferers will ensure the public feels safe, and that life is a combination of curses and blessings, not just adversity.

All things considered, it will be socially beneficial if the amount of bad and good news can be set at a balanced level, as this makes sure the public opinion is optimistic.

301 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. be favored overbe preferred to 
  2. social evil (n): bad thing in the society 
  3. acknowledge the benefit
  4. coverage (n): news 
  5. advocate (v): publicly support
  6. a sense of optimism
  7. concern (v): to be about a particular subject
  8. viewing figure (n): the number of people watching a programme
  9. the field of media
  10. handsome living: a large amount of money
  11. on-going (adj): still happening or being done
  12. current affair (n): events that are happening now
  13. stand a chance of doing sth
  14. philanthropist (n) someone helping people by giving money 
  15. devote (v): to spend a lot of time and effort doing sth
  16. rush (v): hurry to do sth
  17. aid (n) help with doing something
  18. lend a helping hand
  19. curses and blessings: bad and good situations
  20. adversity (n):  a difficult period in your life with many problems
  21. set a balanced level
Essay sample #9

Essay sample #9

Essay task 9

The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.

To what extent do you agree?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: useful subjects such as IT should be emphasized, but art and music are still important.

Body 1: practical subjects are very important

  • these subjects prepare students for their work
    • example: IT, economics 
  • those subjects serve as basis for students' working life
    • example: Math, physics and other theoretical subjects. 
    • without them, students may not work effectively and be promoted

Body 2: cutting art and music will lead to serious issues

  • these make life more satisfied and relaxed
    • without them, life will be boring
  • arts makes sure students balance their logic thinking
    • without them, students may focus on only the most prominent benefits

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

It is generally believed that education needs to brace students for the demands of the modern world. Some people claim art and music should be omitted from the curriculum in order for children to focus on more practical subjects. From my perspective, useful subjects such as information technology definitely should be emphasized in school, but art and music still play an important role.

As a matter of fact, practical subjects are of paramount importance in education. Many of these subjects prepare students for the world of work. Information technology, for example, gives students great job opportunities in their working career. Students who major in economics and related fields have a high chance of being employed at well-known companies. Furthermore, there are subjects that serve as basis for students' working life. Math, physics, and certain theoretical subjects help to enhance students' reasoning ability. Without a good knowledge of these, it will be hard for an individual to work effectively and climb the promotion ladder.

Such benefits do not mean those subjects are everything: an exclusion of art and music will surely lead to serious issues. First, these provide people with a sense of beauty, which in turn make their lives more satisfied and relaxed. Without music, for example, the world will be a land or boredom. In addition, the field of arts makes sure students can balance their logic thinking. If students only study science, chances are that they tend to ignore important values in the society and will focus on only the most prominent benefits: they need to develop an adequate understanding of arts as well to ensure their contributions to the society are positive.

All things considered, it is of great significance to help students focus on science and related fields, but an ignorance of arts will result in an imbalance in thought, and an imbalance in life.

309 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. brace (v) : to get ready for sth unpleasant
  2. omit (v) : to fail to include sb or sth
  3. play an important role: to be involved in sth in an important way
  4. be of paramount importance = be of great significance: be very important
  5. serve as basis for sb: provide basic knowledge for sb
  6. reasoning ability : critical thinking ability
  7. climb the promotion ladder : to be promoted
  8. exclusion (n) : a situation in which sth is deliberately not included
  9. a sense of sth (n) : a strong feeling or belief 
  10. in turn: as a result
  11. prominent (adj): easy to see or notice
  12. adequate (adj): good enough
  13. ignorance (n): lack of knowledge about sth
Essay sample #8

Essay sample #8

Essay task 8

People in the lime light have a responsibility to set an example for others by their good behavior. 

Do you agree or disagree?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: celebrities should not be under an obligation to lead a good example.

Body 1: celebs strongly impact many people

  • their followers will modify their behavior to resemble them
  • when celebs go off track, their fans will be disappointed
    • Example: fans cry when their idol commit child abuse. 

Body 2: it is not fair to force celebs to always be a good example 

  • to be human is to err
    • Mistakes, slips, errors, and even offenses, are facts of a person's life
  • celebrities are not the one source of image to refer to
    • Schools and parents do play a prominent role

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

It is publicly acknowledged that celebrities should establish a positive image, as they have great influence on the public in general. While I believe a proportion of the population may look to these people as role models, I strongly reject the idea that they are under an obligation to lead a good example.

It goes without saying that TV celebs have an enormous impact on a large number of people. If they appear with a positive image in the media, chances are that their followers take pride in them, and will modify their own behavior to resemble these so-called mentors. On the contrary, when these celebs go off track, fans will end up in disappointment, and will either support their idol or join the anti-fans. There have been examples where fans break down in tears when their idols commit child abuse.

Even though these celebs have the ability to exert gigantic influence upon other people, it is not fair to force them to always lead a good example in life. TV personalities are, after all, human beings: and to be human is to err. Mistakes, slips, errors, and even offenses, are facts of a person's life, and definitely no one can be in full control of their behavior. Furthermore, celebrities are not the one and only source of image to refer to. Schools and parents do play a prominent role in educating a country's future citizens, and they can do a considerably more effective job. As a matter of fact, idolism is temporary, while education is a long-lasting process.

Taking everything into account, it is fair to say that celebrities are welcome to lead a role model to their fans, but attribute a responsibility for them to be all-time moral characters would be impossible, and certainly not advisable.

298 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. celebrity = celeb = personality (n) : a famous person
  2. a proportion of sth (n) : a quantity of sth
  3. under an obligation: forced to do sth for legal or moral reasons
  4. have an enormous impact on: strongly affect
  5. take pride in : to be proud of
  6. modify (v) : change sth slightly, especially to improve it
  7. resemble (v) : to be similar to sb or sth
  8. mentor (n) : an experienced person who helps sb with less experience
  9. end up in sth : to be in a particular place or state after doing something or because of doing it
  10. break down in tears: to start crying, especially in public
  11. child abuse (n): bad treatment of a child by an adult
  12. exert (v) : to use influence to affect or achieve sth
  13. to be human is to err: it is natural for people to sometimes make mistakes
  14. play a prominent role: to be involved in sth, especially in a way that is important 
  15. long-lasting (adj): continue for a long time
  16. attribute sth to sb (v): to think of sb as having a particular quality or feature
Essay sample #7

Essay sample #7

Essay task 7

Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers while others think that this is the role of parents. 

Discuss both sides and give your opinion. 

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: a combination of both the teacher and the parent will produce the best solution.

Body 1: teachers have power to discipline children

  • teachers have to train students morally and punish them when necessary
    • students are often afraid of teachers
  • but some students do not fear teachers
    • Example: girls fights

Body 2: parents can control their children

  • Parents can monitor children's behavior at home
    • many children always fear their parents
  • Parents have close relationship with their children
    • private talk among family members can work

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

There has been a dramatic increase in discipline-related issues in modern schools. Many people take the view that it is teachers who should take responsibility, while others believe only parents can solve the issue. To the best of my knowledge, both arguments are reasonable, but a combination of both the teacher and the parent will produce the best solution.

On the one hand, teachers have the necessary power to discipline children. The government in Vietnam states clearly in educational laws that the role of the teacher includes training moral values, and apply punishment whenever students fail to follow regulations. Certainly, most students are afraid of their teacher, and will not dare to break disciplinary rules. However, there are still disobedient students who do not fear the the teacher's authority, and these still go against the established laws. This can be seen in cases of girl fights reported monthly in Vietnamese newspapers.

On the other hand, parents not only have control over their children, but also an emotional tie. Although parents do not meet their children when they are at school, they have the rest of the day to monitor their children's behavior. Many naughty students always fear their parents and never dare to show any tongue-in-cheek attitude. Besides, the intimate relationship between parents and children makes it easier to educate them morally. Family gatherings, as well as private father-son or mother-daughter talks, can have enormous effects on children's way of thinking. The teacher may have great authority, but parents can get bad-mannered children to turn over a new leaf.

All things considered, to solve the problem of growing disciplinary issues in Vietnam, it is absolutely a must to use a combination of both parents and teachers. Each has their own strengths, and will complement each other.

296 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. discipline-related (adj) : relating to the problem of discipline
  2. moral (adj) : relating to right and wrong and the way that people should behave
  3. regulation (n) : an official rule
  4. disobedient = naughty = bad-mannered (adj)
  5. authority (n) : power
  6. tie (n) : relationship or connection
  7. monitor (v) : to regularly check or watch someone 
  8. tongue-in-check (adj) : humorous, not serious
  9. intimate (adj) : very close to someone
  10. gathering (n) : meeting together
  11. turn over a new leaf : to change your life by becoming a better person
  12. a must (n) : something that is absolutely necessary
  13. strength (n) : good point
  14. compliment (v) : to combine well with something
Essay sample #6

Essay sample #6

Essay task 6

Education should be accessible to everyone of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: I strongly believe not all levels of education should be provided free or charge

Body 1: certain levels should be free

  • fundamental form for children aged 6 to 11
  • primary, secondary and high school
  • if they are free, overall skills and competence will be enhanced

Body 2: certain types must come with a price

  • Under-graduate and post-graduate education 
    • people can earn high salary later
    • payment is reasonable
  • If they are free, students will ignore their learning
    • results will be bad
    • fee represents responsibility

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

It is generally agreed that education is a necessity, and a right for all citizens. However, I strongly believe not all levels of education should be provided free or charge.

Certain levels of schooling can be freely accessible. Many countries in the world need to make sure all people have access to the most fundamental form of education; therefore, they offer costless education for children aged 6 to 11. Primary schools, secondary schools, and high schools can fall into this category. In fact, a large number of students drop out of school annually due to financial problems. If these basic levels of education are free, the overall skills and competence of a country's population will be enhanced.

However, certain types of teaching and training must come with a price. Under-graduate and post-graduate education are the best cases in point. These are offered to those who would like to upgrade their academic understanding as well as polish expert skills. People who finish these programs are likely to make a handsome income in their future life. Therefore, asking to pay is reasonable. Besides, those who decide to continue this education must be well aware of the value of schooling they receive: if university is free, students will simply ignore their learning, and the overall results will be large-scale retraining. Fees ensure a sense of responsibility.

All things considered, it is necessary to impose a fee on certain types of education, notably post-high school levels, while the lower levels should be freely available to all citizens. This both ensures a general betterment of citizens' skills and a strong sense of discipline in students.

270 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. necessity (n): a thing that is needed in a situation
  2. access (n): the right or opportunity to have or use something
  3. fundamental (adj): basic
  4. category (n): a group of people or things that have similar qualities
  5. a case in point (n): an example
  6. polish (v): improve a skill 
  7. handsome (adj): a handsome amount of money is large
  8. large-scale (adj): involving a large number of people or things
  9. retraining (n): the act of learning, or teaching someone, new skills
  10. notably (adv): especially
  11. betterment (n): improvement
Essay sample #5

Essay sample #5

Essay task 5

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is important.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

OUTLINE

Thesis statement: both opinions are reasonable, and I support the combination of both 

Body 1: benefits of university training

  1. enhance academic knowledge
  2. facilitate critical thinking & creativity 
  3. show perseverance & talent

Body 2: benefits of experience and soft skills

  1. experience
    • prove the productivity 
    • reflected through questions and reference to letters 
  2. soft skills
    • ensure a person's ability
    • example: teamwork and communication

Conclusion: restate

SAMPLE ANSWER

In the modern age, it might be an enormous challenge for certain people to seek employment. Many put forth the idea that university education takes the lead in ensuring job opportunities, while others believe it is more essential to obtain experience and polish soft skills. As far as I am concerned, both opinions are reasonable to certain extents, and I strongly advocate a combination of both if one successfully lands a post.

On the one hand, university training offers certain benefits. In terms of academic knowledge, college students surely will be able to enhance their understanding of the major they have chosen. Furthermore, the process of tertiary education facilitates a person’s critical thinking as well as creativity at problem solving. Finally, an undergraduate degree, with or without distinction, signals one’s capability to digest huge amount of information and is proof of one’s perseverance and talent. Employees certainly will look to such achievement as the most reliable evidence of work competence.

On the other hand, experience and soft skills do make contributions to the job application procedure. Experience, firstly, conveys to the employer whether the candidate actually can be a productive member of the company. Questions related to working experience as well as reference to letters from former employers will also clarify one’s capability at work. Soft skills, similarly, help to ensure a person’s ability to carry out work more effectively. In the modern era, team work and communication are core to corporations’ success. Therefore, being able to fare well in teams as well as to transmit one’s ideas smoothly lends a helping hand.

All things considered, it is important to bear in mind that in order for a job candidate to be offered a certain position, he or she needs to present both an academic background, preferably in university education, and abundant working experience as well as welcome soft skills.

311 words, written by Mr. Bui Duc Tien

POWER YOUR LANGUAGE

  1. seek employment: find a job
  2. put forth (v): state an opinion
  3. polish (v): improve a skill
  4. advocate (v): support 
  5. land (v): get something you wanted, especially a job
  6. tertiary education (n): education at a college or university
  7. facilitate (v): make something possible or easier to happen
  8. distinction (n): the excellent quality
  9. perseverance (n): determined attitude
  10. clarify (v): explain clearly
  11. fare well: do well
  12. transmit (v): pass information to other people
  13. bear in mind: remember to consider something