Actual Test: Writing 11/11/2017

Actual Test: Writing 11/11/2017

QUESTION

Many people in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the causes and effects?

OUTLINE

Intro: State causes & effects.

Body 1: Causes

  • Changing values
  • Examples: Western & Eastern cultures; Vietnamese, Japanese...

Body 2: Effects

  • Collapse society
  • Explain: importance of family to society
  • Lead to societal breakdown

Conclusion: Restate causes & effects.

In the age of growing business, people tend to set less time aside for their dearest ones. In fact, family time has seen a dwindle in both quantity and quality. The trend, strikingly enough, is visible in countries worldwide; it stems mainly from changing values and is exerting notable impact on social development. 

As technology encroaches upon the older way of life, and as East meets West on all frontiers, values of varying cultures are undergoing major shifts. Individualistic cultures, such as those found in the USA and many European countries, have always favored the individual: family members do not cling onto each other so much as those in the East. Yet even the Eastern counterparts are seeing themselves breaking away from the traditional family model and leaning towards detached family members. The sense of responsibility has changed, so has distribution of time: numerous Vietnamese youngsters now would rather spend days at internet bars than having a 5-minute sit-down with their brothers and sisters, and Japanese husbands and wives would bury themselves at work 20 hours a day, only to see each other just a little bit before bedtime. New generations across the globe, indeed, are seeing themselves shouldering other perceived responsibilities, and 'make home' is no longer much regarded as the woman's job, or anybody's job. 

With less family time on a societal level, the family structure is on the brink of collapse. It is from the family that one builds up their whole future: formative years teach a child how to behave, show respect, solve problems, communicate decently, make polite requests, etc; puberty years throw children into bits of tantrums and depression, and only parents can pull them down and out; the crisis of adult life is so complicated it can only be tackled if grown-ups face in other in meaningful and constructive conversations. With time being geared towards other priorities, all these diminish. What ensues is the birth of disobedient and aggressive little kids, non-attentive and rebellious teenagers, as well as uncooperative and ruthless adults. It goes without saying when key social components, namely humans, go off track, so will the society itself. 

It all boils down to social values embedded upon a person's mindset: without a proper sense of familial duty, none will spare the least of their time for the social unit. As this penetrates life, people become detached, threatening to topple society as a whole. 

 

Word count: 405, written by Mr Tien (IELTS 8.5).

VOCABULARY

1. to see a dwindle in both quality and quantity: giảm cả về chất lượng và số lượng
2. to stem mainly from: có nguyên nhân chủ yếu là
3. changing values (n) những giá trị đang thay đổi
4. to exert notable impact on: có tác động mạnh mẽ lên
5. to encroach upon (v) xâm nhập vào
6. East meets West: Phương Tây tiếp xúc với phương Đông
7. to undergo major shifts: trải qua những thay đổi lớn
8. to cling onto each other: bám lấy nhau
9. a 5-minute sit-down with: ngồi xuống nói chuyện 5 phút
10. to bury oneself at work: vùi mình vào công việc
11. to shoulder other responsibilities: mang những trách nhiệm khác
12. be on the brink of collapse: có nguy cơ sụp đổ
13. formative years (n) những năm đầu đời
14. bits of tantrum (n) những cơn nóng giận của con trẻ
15. to face each other in conversations: đối thoại với nhau
16. what ensues is: kéo theo là
17. to go off track: đi sai đường
18. It all boils down to: Tất cả có thể quy về
19. to spare the least of one's time for: không thèm dành thời gian cho

 

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